Hey bloggers!
Today, I will be sharing the poems I've made up. There were 6 poems I wrote. 3 of them were about a car ride to the beach, the other 3 were about the day at the beach.
On the 3rd page there are 2 cinquain poems. One
based on the car ride and the other based on the beach.
I really enjoyed writing these poems because they really got me thinking. I needed to write sentences that rhymed, that had the right punctuation and also, that were creative. I like writing poems because there are a lot of different types of poems. I write them because you could talk about anything and it is very playful. I hope you enjoyed reading my blogpost. Make sure to give me some feedback in one of the comments. Blog you later!
Outstanding Rael. I love that you have focussed on a theme across several different poetry styles. You have used some great words phrases and kept them poetic. It really shows you are thinking of how to lay them out. I really like the lines .....Excitement builds even more you can see from your window, the beautiful shore. Well done.
ReplyDeleteKa pai Rael, amazing poems! I especially enjoyed the cinquains. I love writing poems too. I agree with you that it's challenging because sometimes your first idea for a line doesn't fit because it's too long or doesn't rhyme. Last week I learnt about Clerihews and Kennings. Maybe you could look them up and have a go! Have you ever performed a poem?
ReplyDeleteHi Rael. My name is Josie. I really like how you started with Hey bloggers. That was awsesome. I also like how you added pictures. I really liked your car ride one because it rhymes Bye Rael. Have a good week.💖😊🙋
ReplyDeleteHi Rael, I think your poems are fantastic. I like the way you have used rhyme in the Car Ride poem. Make s the journey sound like fun. I love the idea of you performing these poems (from Phil in one of the other comments - maybe you could present them on a slide and screen castify yourself reading them? Great post - well set out and I love the pics.
ReplyDeleteHi Rael, Its Daniel.
ReplyDeleteI really liked all of you poems especially the acrostic poems. I did one on my name. I hope you had lots of fun writing them. My favourite poem out of all of them is the one about the beach. It is so creative. Blog you later!
Fabulous writing Rael, poetry is such a wonderful way to play with language. I like how you have used different forms of poetry. Do you know what a Kenning is? Have a look at your sister's poetry work from W2, there is a slide that explains how to create Kennings - I think you will like the way they are structured. You've demonstrated a range of skills across these poems - you've: used rhyme effectively, structured the metre of the poems (using the syllabic structure required for each style) and used very descriptive language. I can't wait to read more of your work. Keep up the awesome blogging!
ReplyDeleteHi Rael, welcome to week three of distance learning. What a busy three weeks you've had. Thank you for sharing with us what you have been doing.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the creative thinking you put into your poems! I had a little chuckle when I read you acrostic poem titled, 'Car Ride'. 'Annoying others' and 'raspberry drink spills' were fun and humerous lines.
Keep up the awesome effort and keep those blog posts coming.
Hi Rael, I really enjoyed reading your poems. You have put lots of thought into your writing. I could close my eyes and imagine.... your words were very descriptive. They also made me smile.... bringing to mind car rides and beach outings with my family. I am lucky enough to be able to walk to our local beach during lockdown. I am sure we are all looking forward to the days when we can go on car rides to the beach again. In the meantime we can enjoy your fantastic writing and dream of good things to come.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great work. Stay safe in your bubble. Be kind to your family.
From Mrs Mackenzie
Thanks to all of you guys. You have given me A LOT of feedback. Thank you for the tips you gave me. I really needed it. Thank you so much for the comments.
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You're welcome Rael, you deserve it. I think we should organise a poetry slam! Have you heard of them?
DeleteI haven't heard of it before.
DeleteIf you're interested check out this article about poetry slams MAybe there could be a Waikowhai poetry slam online?
DeleteWow! Hi Rael, my name is Leilani and I am from Owairaka District School. Phil gave me a link to your blog to check out. I am so inspired by your work!
ReplyDeleteBLOG YA LATER! Leilani.
Wow Rael. Great use of themes and language for your poetry. You used rhyming words and punctuation to create effect and paint the picture in the readers mind. Makes me excited to be at the Beach. Interesting publishing using different formats. Keep on creating - poetry is a great way to show your author skills. (I am the Deputy Principal at Papakura Central School in Auckland)
ReplyDeleteThank you for the awesome feedback.
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